Flashbacks and Foreshadowing
by Sandy Tritt
Flashbacks and foreshadowing are tools we have to add
dimension to our writing. Flashbacks give us the ability to see into a
character's past in real time.
Foreshadowing drops hints of what may happen in
the future. Are either one required in order to tell an effective story?
No. However, there are times when they can add depth to our characters or
suspense to our plot, and trust me, we can use whatever help we can get.
Flashbacks interrupt the current action of the story to
show a scene from the past. As such, we must always weigh the advantages
to the disadvantages. Are the benefits we receive worth leaving our
characters dangling in time while we go into the past? If so, don't
hesitate to use a flashback. If not, continue with your story line and
find other ways, such as exposition, discussion, etc. to entwine the past
with the present.
If you choose to use a flashback, you must tip the
reader that you are leaving the present. This can be done with a
transition statement such as, "John remembered the day his father died."
Then, use past perfect ("had") two or three times to complete the clue
that we are entering real time in the past. And you are in the past. Act
out your scene with action and dialogue, and when you are finished, clue
the reader that you are returning to the present by using past perfect
once or twice, and, if necessary, another transition sentence ("But that
was then and this was now, and John had to let the past stay in the
past."). Here is an example:
Danny remembered more about his mother's death than
he'd ever told anyone. The day she had died, she had called
each of her sons to her bedside individually.
"Pour me a cup of fresh water, please," she said, her
voice thick with the Polish accent that decorated her words when she was
tired or sick.
Danny filled the cup, careful not to splash it on the
"Now, hand me my lipstick."
But he didn't leave. He stood in the doorway and
had watched as she had swallowed the pills, three at a time,
until they were gone.
Even now, Danny felt responsible for her death. He
looked at his father and swallowed hard . . .
Note that once we entered the flashback, we stopped
using past perfect ("had") and just acted out the story. Otherwise, the "hads"
weigh down the prose and suck the action out of the words.
Foreshadowing is even easier to use. It usually consists
of only one or two sentences, and is especially effective when ending a
scene or chapter. An example of foreshadowing:
Sam wished he could rid himself of the sick feeling
in his gut that told him something terrible was going to happen, and
Study what works in fiction you admire. Notice the tools
the author uses to enter the past or foretell the future. Unless you are a
writer, these techniques should appear invisible and smooth. But as a
writer, you must learn to use these techniques to add punch to your own
work. Good luck.
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Love Them or Leave Them
by Kathy Hartwell
Eventually, you, the writer, will
become a pack rat (or perhaps you already are). By that
statement, I mean that you probably have unfinished manuscripts lying
around your house or office. For various reasons, they were never
completed or published, and they ended up being stored in boxes, on
shelves, or on floppy disks. Yet, like devoted pets, you hated to get
rid of them.
For example, if you have fifty manuscripts from a variety of sources
and ideas, or from long, summer afternoons at the keyboard, what
should you do with the hoard of papers?
First, you can put them
in order, and do your favorites first. Do you have an essay about
butterflies that supplemented a science project? Make the most of the
theme by altering it into a short story or poem.
Second, you can begin
with the shorter ones. You can choose this approach if you are short
on time or are between writing projects. In addition, you can
incorporate dialogue that would provide characterization and drama to
Third, what about
beginning with the more developed topics?
technique can be capitalized on if you need subsequent articles.
Moreover, you would be able to conserve your valuable time to
perfecting the storyline(s). On the other hand, you can select the
best of the stories, or the one that means the most to you, and work
on it alone.
If you are short on
ideas for an upcoming deadline, pick one that you feel has the best
publishing potential. Also, make sure the topic is what the editor
(or publisher) is looking for.
If you feel that you
cannot utilize the present time in revising the manuscripts, set them
aside and work on completely new subject matter. However, I would
suggest that you briefly look over them to see where past mistakes
were made and if you have overcome those weaknesses.
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feel the manuscript is beyond repair, or if you do not write in that
specific genre any longer, give the unpublished draft(s) to someone in
your family. Sometimes, they will cherish that draft more so than the
publishing world. In short, never throw any manuscript away.
Besides, who knows what fortunes could develop if your lost
manuscript is found after you have become a renowned author?
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Life's an onion. Not a new concept—Usually, what we reveal to others
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at the heart of the onion really a heart? Is it, then, the onion crying —
or the one who’s peeling…?
Angela Louie, mother of a teenager and a disabled child, is entering a
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About the Author
Evelyn Schneider was born and raised in Germany. She has written
"almost anything from plant-care tags to television sitcoms." She lives in
San Diego, California.
She says, Two-bit Dancing was inspired by a television talk show, and
laughs. Then, serious: "The true inspiration came many years ago while
visiting a police fair. I was a teenager then and should have been
impressed by the latest crime-fighting technology. But what remained in my
soul where the images of cubicles upon cubicles filled with photographs of
children -- not victims of some far-away war but sons and daughters of
modern families: burnt, starved, locked away.